Comments : Kill My God

  • 16 years ago

    by Sarah Davis

    I think it just needs a conclusion now. As far as everything else goes it's nicely written. The title is eye-catching. I don't know about a conclusion though. Maybe you could do something along the lines of either describing the person's death, or survival, in the poem as one? Either way, hope you'll finish it soon. I'll be checking often to see if you have. :)

    ~sarah~