Comments : Stentch Of Remorse (Group Title Toss)

  • 13 years ago

    by Laura

    This poem brought about feelings of sadness and anager for me....i know what it is like to be the one who has a mate be unfaithful.
    however there is a good mixture of remorse within this write. the flow was flawless and the rhymes were not forced. overall very well written..
    altho i have a few suggestions...

    this line felt like it read a lil awkward
    'Aware I Was Wasn't True' maybe if yu take out one of the 'was'

    and for this line i would suggest removing the 's' from the word shes

    'And The Damage That Shes Did'

    but it was a fantastic write and enjoyable read!