Lol that is really good, you beat some of the poffesionals on this! for ur first poem u kick ass!!! nice work,
One thing though.....
"But how can I tell you,
That I want to be your girlfriend."
You said he put ur heart through a shredder and all...why would u want to be his gf?
and i think you need to make this a little clearer, as in for example...

"You have put my heart through a shredder,
And not even I could put it back again,
But I can't just get over you,
For I think I still feel love
For you it's true,
Would you never hurt me again?
If I once again gave you my heart to be friend?
But I just don't know how..
How can I tell you?
That I still want to be your girlfriend.."

Idk I just made it up then...you get my point?
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