Comments : Just by Doing What He Did

  • 16 years ago

    by Blackthistle

    Awh! That poem is so adorable.. It speaks.. Like really seeing because it's so true, you know?

    ~Kate~

  • 16 years ago

    by Gabba Gabba Hey

    I'm sure you don't need me to tell you--but you are amazing. Your poetry show depth-you are profound! You should try writing sonnets....! This tells you a lot, and gives you valuable advice. You are going to be AMAZING when you get older...

    Keep writing--

    Toni

  • 16 years ago

    by Live WeLL

    Wow this poem was amazing and you did a great job writing it.. not only did it flow really well but it told a great story.. it was sad but it had a very important lesson and you are right...we do need more people like that little boy in the world.. but we also need more people to end that type of violence and more people than will stand up for themselves..

    anyway amazing job. I really enjoyed reading it and once i started, i couldnt stop because I was interested to find out what was going on. Great job. Keep it up! =)

  • 16 years ago

    by halie

    Wow
    that wuz great
    it had a great lesson in it to
    it rlly said alot
    i got nurves wen it said she hit him though lol
    but 5/5
    i loved it!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Hollywood

    Wow i liked this one alot it was surley a great lession.. and your friend is right we do need more people like him,this boy is just a child and children tend to be more forgiving then teenagers or adults. They all want to love and be loved by some one. If they are not loved they will do anything to get loved.When their parents are mad and depressed they/we tend to think its our fault for this..when our mother,fathers,sisters,brothers or any one gets mad or leaves we think its our fault. The boy was/is strong and if this was a real story he will grow up a sweet boy to a man and will forever be strong no matter what god throws his way! but great job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Flower Child[hippie]

    Great poem :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Unamed

    Aw!!..this had a really good message and the world would provably be better to forgive.
    u did great on this.
    no ceitizizmQ.hehe idk hot to spell that.....

    anyways good job
    Aly