Comments : Hello Goodbye

  • 16 years ago

    by shade127

    My second favorite of the one's I;ve read from you. NICE! 5++

  • 16 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    The rhyme at the end of the second stanza is kind of akward, it might just be me lol. Besides that everything else seemed perfect. It started off so pleasant and ended so sad. And it still was a beautiful and heartfelt piece. 5/5

    marcella

  • 16 years ago

    by Andrew Morton

    Haha..i love this concept!! a very nice tribute to love at first sight..though it may be rare it does exist somewhere out there..and you portrayed that great

  • 16 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Great poem. Very heartfelt and meaningful. I loved your choice of words and it was beautifully written. I like how you started off the poem with a narration; that really draws the reader in. I also like how the first word is "Hello" and the last word is "goodbye", which matches the title. Good Job.

    -Shannon <3

  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    LoveloveLOVE it! This is amazing, the wording and imagery go so well together, you have a way of writing to captivate the reader and keep them wanting to read more, that is a talent you should be aware that you have...and I sure hope you believe those words..

    ""I'm wonderful, thank you, now that I've met you."
    Oh only if that statement could have stayed so true."

    ^ Those lines were AMAZING. As was the whole piece, but if I was to copy out every line I liked of it then you`d just be reading your poem lol. :]

    5.5

  • 16 years ago

    by Hermosa

    Loved it, it had so much feeling in it....goood job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Kayla

    Oh my gosh... this was such a beautiful poem, the title alone captured my interest and I just had to see what it was all about! You did such an amazing job with this poem and I enjoyed reading every single line of it. In some ways, I can relate to it.. I feel sort of connected to it. When I was reading it I thought of my ex-boyfriend Tim who broke my heart a few years ago.

    Not only was the poem beautiful, but you kept it so neat and organized! It looks so professional.. a lot of people these days don't even use comma's and periods, don't even capitalize the beginning of each line. Great job!! Please keep up the awesome work! I look forward to reading other wonderful creations from you soon... 5/5 <3 <3 <3 <3

    ~Rikku~