This was really good.
I loved the last couplet.
It was so wonderful,
you took the concept of death
and twist it.
It was really great!
Yet, your words weren't really correct,
as in "tooken" should be "taken"
and "A innocent" should be "An innocent"
yet it was great!

A very sad emotional poem with a good choice of word I like your styel.

It's really an impressive poem playing with meanings. you twiste the reality of agony into trying to force a fake smile by pretending that dying in a beautiful day is worthy

good luck
Her Guardian

"Yet it is rare when those moments interconnect."
Ah yes of course that is true, but these types of things do happen. I like this poem for that reason because of your use of a positive and a negative.

It is always nice to remind people of both forces that captivate our world, good or evil... I like the twist that you add to the end of your poem as well.

Overall I'd say you did a fantastic job with this. Great work!