Hey,
I love this poem, its very sweet and it looks like song, I would love to hear such songs.
I like your choice of words and it flows nicely, except for one tiny thing..you wrote : She don't see it, wouldn't it be better if it was, she doesn't see, or am I wrong? cuz I can be wrong too:P well anyway good work, love your poem 5/5
kisses Stephanie

Its kind of a slang poem the way you wrote it like she know i love her.
maybe to help the flow it could be she knows i love her! other than that you did not force the rhyming and this was an enjoyable poem!
well done

Cool dude, you are intelligent

Wow david powerful write
i liked it alot
keep it up!

Beautiful poem David

Oooh this is so cute, this girl is lucky, lovely poem