I'm so glad that this poem isn't true but i know that there are people out there that have to go through this. You've done a great job of conveying how it must feel to have someone that you love so much pass away, even if you've never been through it. My favourite has to be the second stanza though. Not sure if it was intentional but talking about never letting the fire die even when the guy dies at the end is very clever.

5/5

Em xXx

Brings tears to my eyes. You have an ability to write such emotion-filled words without having to experience them first hand. Although as people have already mentioned ^^^ the flow isn't perfect but I love this poem anway. 5/5

Alyssa. x

Wow... such a poignant description..

"Later that night he was gone,
He was sent up in the sky.
I hold his hand and continue to say I love you,
As I sit by the bed and cry."
^^ very heartfelt... full of emotions...

very good job...

God, when i got to the cancer part, my heart came up to my throat, and i had a gut feeling!..wow!!

and god i have tears in my eyes!..

i absolutly love this...god im shaking!!!

anyways great job!

Aly 5/5

This poem was deeply saddening. Although this don't come from personal experience, that doesn't make it any less true. Unfortunately stories which reflect your poem happen all the time, with loved ones taken away from us. :(

You had a few mistakes here and there, nothing major though.

'I asked, "doctor whats wrong,
Is he going to be okay?"'
^^ You have to capitalize "Doctor", and you've missed an apostrophe in "What's".

'He said, "Im sorry to have to say this,
But I have some bad news......'
^^ You alos need an apostrophe in "I'm".

I noticed you made mistakes such as those (^) in quite a few places. They aren't major, and don't really take much away from the actual poem itself, but it's always good to look neat and proper, otherwise some people may judge your poem harshly as well.

Nice job, though. A truly sad read.

I think i had read this poem before.....its good, and i think the 1st time i read it, it made me cryy...

<3 Aly

Aw. This is so sad. If this is a true story, I'm terribly sorry. It was well written, and so filled with emotion. It was absolutely beautiful. I loved the rhymes, they were very good.

5/5

``Briana