Aww this is sad.and kinda deep.. i really like it..

the flow was good...and i dont see anything that needs to be improved on.. nice work. 5/5

Sad and emotional..well expressed...

flow was good. i love how you write.

another 5/5 from me.

This was so heartbreaking to read, and yet so beautifully written at the same time.

The pain and despair is easily felt by the reader, and I liked how you also mixed determination with those emotions, I thought that made the piece very strong.

Beautifully written.