Comments : A Painful Mist

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    This is excellently written, with great wording, and a lot of emotions. My favorite stanza is:
    -You can buy me all the things in the world,
    Open a million doors.
    What you want is already broken,
    So take my heart, its yours.-

    Keep up, 5/5 from me

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    So touching, sad and emotional. You described pain greatly, I enjoyed in this piece. It has many excellent and very original lines. 5/5