This is powerful and shows the big heart that you carry. It is a pleasure to know that there are still good friends out there who can feel the pains of others.

Well done...

---Sher

Very powerful. you have a big heart, i loved it. it is very emotional from where you are standing, and you portrayed that very well. 5/5

Oh wow! i can really relate you worded it perfectly deffinately 5/5
the flow and emotion were both very strong great job!!!

laura

Amazing poem! I especially loved the line

"I swore I'd do my best
To be your pain-proof vest"

I completely understand how you feel and what you are trying to say in this poem because I have gone through the same thing or atleast something similar. People just dont want to stay the same it seems and it always seems that they leave the ones that care about them the most behind worring about them. I hope this person comes back

Its a nice poem but could use description and transition 4/5

I have to say, i loved it. the way you described what you wanted and how it closes the door, it was well written

Sorry, i did that comment on the wrong poem.

Great poem good job keep it up

This is precious. Your sincere heart oozed out between each word. (: Full of several emotions, and a nicely portrayed image.

Take Care,
Smiles,
*N

"I swore I'd do my best
To be your pain-proof vest"

i love the metaphor you used in that line..and the entire message of the poem is a very powerful one, keep up the good work

Good piece! You've got an unusual rhyme scheme going on in this one, but i like that you stick to your scheme and don't jump around so that the reader can keep to the poem and not lose your train of thought. Good job on that!
*ME*