Its beautiful nice expressions...
check out my poems..leave a comment if u like it or just rate it...i will appreciate it

Wow...gives me chills hehe i like it, i imagined myself, i imagined every step, your poem kinda took me into a fantasy or another weird reality and when a poem can do that to me, it means the person who wrote it is a really good writer, keep writing :)
and if you ever do post another poem like this let me know, id like to read it :)
dani

Beautiful word association. i loved it. 5/5

Hiya Cara,

Thanks for your compliment.
I have just read 'my first true happiness' It has really given me a glimps into a painful world. My niece self harms and is going through hell at the moment. I really do think I should introduce her to this site and your poem.

Take care. I really liked this one 5/5

Thanks for my comment. this poem is so amazing i felt everything you wrote WHICH MAKES IT EASY TO RELATE TO..KEEP ON DOING WHAT YOUR DOING.YOUR A WONDERFUL WRITER.

Wow. This has some really true emotion, I've had a poem as well as a moment exactly like that. I too have sat and wondered if it was worth it. This is amazing, keep it up.
~Kallie

Awww
I know how you feel ...
But I never really wondered if it was worth it.
I just thought about it and shook it off.
This one is really good.

Wow this is one so awesome and expressive
"The knife sits on the table,
watching me im unstable
i reach, i pause, i cry
i wonder, worth it to die?"
loved this part more

btw, if they walked away and never listened to you...AM HERE always listening for you
but don't even

Absolutely, positively EXCELLENT!
Loved it all the way!
Loved the structure.
Loved the rhythm and rhyme.
Well thought out and related to myself quite well.
Enjoyed reading this poem, eventhough it is a sad/depressing poem.
Also loved the poem's Title: My First True Happiness
Worked well with the poem itself.
Well done,
Keep it up.
Can't wait for next/more poems.

- Nicole xx

Wow hun, this is really good, and i feel the emotiion of how you were feeling, its honestly great

Well Cara this is different so i guess it would be fictional, although i think most people entertain thoughts like that at some stage in their lives. I think you captured the feelings and emotions of the situation very well
WEll done 5/5

Grant

Wow this poem is really dark...it maybe short but i was able to visualize the dramatic event.I like the twist at the end though, instead of feeling in pain u felt happy

Excellent Job
5/5

Great poem for as short as it was it sucked me in , 5/5