Comments : One Day I Will Fly Away

  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    This has too be one of your best.

    The flow was amazing, the word choice and repetition effective.
    Just a suggestion though. For the last line instead of saying 'One day I will go away' perhaps you should change it too [One day I will fly away].. Then it would intertwine the tittle:)

    5/5 this is one of my fav's.
    Keep it up,
    Elaine.