Bert
Wow! What a piece you have penned here. The imagery is excellent. Paints a very vivid picture for the minds eye.
Excellent job!
Take Care Cindy

Awesome poems, one of beautiful poems I've ever read..... Brilliant!

I only wish I couls sustain such feeling through a lengthy poem such as this..beautiffuly written, Kudos! Timothy r

I'm not sure what point of view you wrote this in, but either way this was a captivating, strong, and tattering poem, which I absolutely adored. This was just purely amazing!

Take care!

~Richhie

Wonderful poem and beautiful words. I just love to read it over and over again.

Well..I was going to pick out my favorite stanza but I couldn't decide! They are all memorable words! Excellent form and flow.. You are immensely talented!

5.5**
<33

Amazing! I loved this piece from beginning to end. The imagery and flow was flawless. So full of power and heart! These two lines especially:

"Ah! heaven! you burn, with fever too, it seems
Are you, as well, a prey to fitful dreams?"

Simply stunning. They will stick with me and
trigger my remembrance to this masterpiece.

The ending was clever as well!

Brilliant work!

Take Care,
Smiles,
*N

Great work. I usually dont alot of long poems because i find alot of them drag on. But this was great. Thanks for writing it :P

G/A

PS: 5/5

Aww ive missed reading ur work. where do u come up with all these interesting words and make ur poems sound so good!!! very powerful poem this one keep it up cant wait to read more =D xx

Really enjoyed this poem, loved all the imagery.

Written brilliantly.

Outstanding! the visuals were amazing! I felt as if i were there. It was really good. I'm out of words thats how good it was lol well thanks for the great write 5/5
~*~Amber~*~

I am speechless... Wow ...! A beautiful piece of art 5/5

Awww.... You have beautiful thoughts.

Ok,... I am torn here, is she being raped by her father, or dreaming of it ? either way I was a little creeped out. It was a great write to make me feel this way, kept my mind going and picturing her laying there...