This has a nice message and has a lovely picture, i'm so sure people could relate on this one.. but honestly, it's not one of the best i've read from you ( i don't know, maybe it's a bit fuzzy to me, though i could still picture out the scence but not so perfect and clear).. sorry hope i didn't offend u

Wow..so interesting topic and really advanced word usage..I liked the flow it makes you want to read more and more

My fave lines are;

We see what it wants
as it tries to solve its own puzzle of time
the way how to live life

Keep it up;
Laura

Ps:If you ever want to do that collab that you talked about two days ago,I'm here

Wow..so interesting topic and really advanced word usage..I liked the flow it makes you want to read more and more

My fave lines are;

We see what it wants
as it tries to solve its own puzzle of time
the way how to live life

Keep it up;
Laura

Ps:If you ever want to do that collab that you talked about two days ago,I'm here

Wow, you've done an amazing job with this poem.....Very creative and thorough, clear and hit's reality like a bomb...beautiful art. 5/5

Oh wow, Andrew.. another amazing poem =) I honestly don't see how you do it! This poem was so neatly organized and it all rhymed up and made sense. Great job!! 5/5 <3 <3

~Rikku~

Love It! Good Work!

5.5**
<3

Amazing poem 5/5

Whoa, that poem like blew my mind or something, it was great, it was descriptive, it was nice, good job 5/5

Oh wow thats awesome man
your poems are great
i really got into that one =]

5/5

xo.louuii

This is great, very clever. Its just like wondering through the mind with twists and turns, images jumping out at you... well done!

Great poem! great title! i loved everything about this poem and i wouldn't change one thing. keep up the good job!

Idea for this poem is excellent. I think that rhyming seems little forced and that leaves bad impression but all in all great poem, Very original and you created excellent rhythm in this piece. Well done!

Ah, the battle of the mind and heart- what are we to do? that would be a cool dream to have- a walk into ourselves...wish I could do that.
I wonder, though...
is it our brain that make the descicions or is it our soul?