Comments : Changes

  • 16 years ago

    by Liz

    Its kinda funny bc it sounds like your talking about something u can buy

    but u really know its not at all like that

    so i like it

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    I don't like the first and the second line, they need some revising, but the rest of the poem is very deep, especially the line:
    -forget about buying broken heart insurance-
    You have good choice of words, but you should work a little bit more on whole atmosphere in this piece. That's just my opinion, I don't want to offend you.
    Keep up!