Wow, great poem. Love the description, bcos its made in a very romantic way, not an obscene one. 5/5. Keep them coming! Saw ur poem, Borrowed time in a contest, and liked it too. Maybe u'll drop by my contest and give it a try. Cya.
Andra

Quite an erotic write, filed with Love and Desire. I enjoyed the read. Add an E to sooth. Peace and Blessings

An amazing piece, it portrays a side of love that many people are afraid to write about or embarrased to.
You, my friend, have done it brilliantly
5/5
*gem*

WOW... gr8 beautfiull.. poem with so many feelings.. gr8 wrk... ur feelings r truly expressed.. all frm heart.. the way u express ur desire.. soo unique.. very well written

Beautiful!! Lovely writing Hun.. Keep it up!!

5.5
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Love the flow and feel of this one....just the right touch of eroticism...the last two lines are perfect! All the best, Debbie

Truly excellent poem , Love the feeling of eroticism and the desire expressed within it,
well done :)