Wow, you really have a way with words, I admire your ideas and creativity. You always menage to pack all emotions and superb imagery and descriptions in so unique and amazing metaphors. You have great talent for writing poems. I usually don't read love poetry because the most of the love poems on this site are too typical or childish, but this one is mind- blowing, totally original and excellently written.
Keep up!
My favorite stanza is:

-Arteries in the shape of snakes,
venomous,
and crying with me.
The acidic drops of heartache (that are their tears)
burning holes into the sky
painted the most delicate shade of blue;
the virulent reflection of her eyes.-

5/5 from me

Wowawo..! Ahh like this is something so different what i would understand under a love poem and specialy a sad one, very original, emotions so powerful, and just very creativ. Mind-blowing really. This is going on my favs :)!
Keep writing. Flawless piece. 5/5

Omg! I don't know where to start complimenting this amazing piece of poem... And you said this poem is mediocre?? This poem is simply phenomenal! The way you express yourself with the description and the combined words to create such astounding images.. From the unique title to the flow of the words in the poem really impressed me..

You have a really superb talent.. Keep writing.. :)