Lovely!

5.5**
<33

This poem was okay. I think you can do matter. It lacked a lot of emotion. I think you should struture it better too. Have the same amount of lines in each stanza. Also have the first letter in each line capitalized. All that I said would really improve your writing.

-Shannon <3

Your best yet! Penned Marvelously.
I really enjoyed this, the emotion's seemed real, the didn't read forced, and the flow was beautiful.

5/5:D
--Elly.

Very nice
again
i like the idea
but the structures off
and i feel like im reading
idn a story
but a good one
nice job