Leah.

This is a very well thought of poem, but if i may offer my advice....

1. Try not to ure repetative word where they are not needed, unless this was particularly how you wanted the poem scripted. What i mean by this is that many of your lines begin with the word "and".

2. When i write a poem, if i am planning on writing slanged words into it, i try and majorities the poem with them, when u simply have 1 or 2, it looks more like your only writing due to necessity rather than want. example:- "And there won't be nothing that you could do" here you could have simply written "And there wouldn't be anything that you could do!", last point i might bring up is to use expressive punctuation, IE:- ! ? etc

Apart from that, i gave you 5/5 for thought, expression (through your words) and talent.

Cant wait to read more of your work.

Matt

It is a very sad poem hope you find the right person that you can share your life with. hope you write again another poem