Truly lovely! short but well written and easy to read. wonderful vocab too! and the last stanza was great the way it broke away from the flow of the rest of the peice! Loved it!

So many storms
So many storms
Oh, so many storms
They will always come this way

Great poem it was awsme but i think mayb u could add at little more feeling into your poems or try n pass on what your feeling to other people through your poems.
apart from that great job!
Carissa xx

This poem came straight out of my heart. I actually wrote it with tears streaming down my face (hence "A torrent of rain, Pounding the flesh beneath")

This is as real as my poetry gets. Everything I wrote was out of pure anguish and pain...

But next time, however, I will go back and edit it. Just to make sure it is accessible and easier to feel the emotion! Thanks for the comments!

-Dan