Good job. Reminds me my poem You Don't Want to be the Smart Guy. 5.

Well done! The flow was a bit rocky for me, but it was raw and emotive --- over all a good read.

Keep it up!

Take Care,
Smiles,
*N

Rah-Rah-Rah!

This poem was a bunch of Rah-rah-rah, although deep in the meaning that many people go though feeling like that, it is just too upfront and blatant. Try to hide the meanings a bit instead of shoving the obvious into over-used words. It was a good poem, and I connected with is, a little, It just wasn't extraordinary, in any sense. In any case, I see potential in your writing, so keep writing and experiancing life to gain inspiration (If you don't have any already, I don't know :P.)

Farewell, Veamm! (btw I like that name)

~Richhhieee

I don't like this one too much. Rhyming seems forced and you could create stronger atmosphere and emotions could be better expressed. This is just my opinion, I think poem is touching but it could be better.

Such a sad poem =(
great subject tho somthing different=)
loved the flow and feeling of it! great rhymes too 5/5

Love
Jacs

I thought some of the rhyme scheme seemed somewhat forced on this piece. however, the pain and emotion in this piece is second to none. a heartfelt write and while somewhat sad am enjoyable read.