Hey,
I think its an awesome poem, that not many words can describe such a story, the flow it good as well as the rhyming, The only thing I don't really like is the title. I think that the title is to 'simple' compared to the rest of the poem. 5/5
kisses stephanie

Beautifully written, you expressed emotions excellently and described pain and sadness on a great way. Wording is also great and whole piece has some interesting rhythm. Well done!

Wow this poem was really good. It's filled with so much emotion and I totally love it. It had a really great flow to it. You did an amazing job on it. 5/5

~Kristina

This feels sad with a hint of darkness. Excellent overall! 5/5

Great write! loved this one from beginning to end. It almost felt as if I was there, which is something i love. The second stanza is my favourite here, but overall the poem is good.
I just secretly wish it could have been a little bit longer.

5/5

xo angelique