Comments : A Poet To His Beloved

  • 12 years ago

    by Jstuckie

    Nice poem i enjoyed it

    comment back :)

  • 12 years ago

    by C Cattaway

    Oh, how much would I love to hear someone speak words like that to me..!! What a gorgeous poem.. it's been a while since I just sat, and read.. I'm glad yours is the one I chose to do so.. Well done, as always. xx

  • 12 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Oh my...well slap me silly ! That was amazing, and even that strong of a word does not truly do this piece the justice it deserves. I have always tried to write using Shakespearean terms, but it always comes out sounding like pooh; you make it seem so darn easy ! You are an amazing girl with an amazing talent, this has got to be one of my favorites from you...which, as you should assume, is a lot to say !

    "Come love, my love, upon this night
    A chance that I should bid you well
    Inside thy arms I wish to hide
    Upon thy breath a whisper tell."

    ^^ I LOVE this stanza, I couldn`t choose which one stood out to me the most because they all did ! Just wow.. lol

    5.5
    :]

  • 12 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    The rhyme and flow in this piece are perfect! I loved the line about lips the color of cherry wine. How beautiful. This had a reneissiance feel to it (my spelling stinks). Really enjoyed the abab rhyming too!
    Amazing piece as always, but a step above the others I think!
    Charisma*

  • 12 years ago

    by mnemosyne

    This is a very well written piece! Strong emotion, wonderful use of Shakespearean terms. The flow skipped a few beats some places for me, but overall was pretty fluid. I loved the line:

    "Upon thy breath a whisper tell"

    Beautiful!
    Nicely done,
    Take Care,
    Smiles,
    *N

  • 12 years ago

    by Andrew Morton

    I adorrre how you've got that touch of ye' old english in this, its like....mad elegant and really refreshing to see, haha..dont come across it too much these days, great work!

  • 12 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Wow, this is wonderful. Usually I'm kind of like, "Meh" when it comes to old English terms. I'm a modern lass. =P But this was truly amazing. The flow was perfect, the wording was perfect.

    It was a beautiful poem. :)

  • 12 years ago

    by JanaeNae

    That was a really good poem...you have a way with words! :]

  • 12 years ago

    by Deana

    I really envy you being able to write in this style,you are so good at it,I think it is the most romantic of all among the different styles.This is really great.

  • 12 years ago

    by Nikko McMorbid

    I imagined those words while standing beside a love in the middle of a full moon light. Tis so romantic.

  • 12 years ago

    by debbylyn

    So beautifully constructed....love the style, rhyme and word usage.....absolutely beautiful love poem!