I really liked the concept of this piece, it was unique and interresting. I think i n the second to last line you mean tales instead of tells. 5/5 from me.

marcella

Wow..haha..killer concept man - i like how you flip between reality and make believe...i dont know how you missed snow white though--she was the biggest sl-ut of them all haha

but seriously, great work on this, throughout the entire piece you get this strong sense of emotions how we can never get what we really want, great work!

I loved the title. & the whole "fairytale" thing was great. Your flow was great and overall the peice was amazing. Great job!
5/5

Amber...

Interesting poem, I love the idea and it is really original. Very powerful atmosphere, you expressed emotions on a fantastic way. Rhythm of this piece is very unique and simply impressing. Well done!

I was gonna write a boring 1 liner jsut to be a pain but this was too good a poem hehe.
i love how u did the lil contrary lines for the fairy tales, i think u should hav put that in the actualy poem and done the same with the lines about u and tried saying something positive about ur feelings.

and in regard to which stanza was better: i think the first 1 was purely bcoz u managed to throw snow white in ther aswell.

I was gonna write a boring 1 liner jsut to be a pain but this was too good a poem hehe.
i love how u did the lil contrary lines for the fairy tales, i think u should hav put that in the actualy poem and done the same with the lines about u and tried saying something positive about ur feelings.

and in regard to which stanza was better: i think the first 1 was purely bcoz u managed to throw snow white in ther aswell.

Aw!!! I love this!!I used to believe in fairytales too..hahaha...Freaky fairytales!!! This one is totally awesome!!! God bless you!!! May your dreams come true! =)

-Pink Butterfly-