Good language skills xx

Nicely penned! The flow was great, except that in the fifth stanza it twitched a little bit for me. This is a very sad piece, with unique language and idea behind it. The ending was superb. A pleasure to read!

Write On!
Take Care,
Smiles,
*N

This is a wonderfully sad poem. The wording was perfect. The flow was amazing. This is a wonderfully penned poem. It was amazing. 5/5

Kalee

I found this beautifully and elegaantly written...heartbreaking to read yet still worded so wonderfully.
I noticed you used a lot of fillers (I, and, etc) which kind of threw me off a little.
I loved the ending...intense and hardhitting and filled with such power.