Powerful and very effective poem, from the beginning to the end. You created superb dark atmosphere with good choice of words, and very unique imagery. Whole poem is greatly written.
My favorite part is:

-Day by day and night by night
I severed angels in their flight
And Heaven cried as angels sung
Like tattered rag-dolls hung.-

Every description is so unique and vivid.
Great job, keep up!
5/5 from me