"Death is too good for me"

This line sticks out of the poem. This should be in your quotes darnit!

Voted 5/5

-Sam
[Deathly'Amore]

Wow. Sad but very powerful! Very strong and well said. Really left an impression. Stay safe. xo

Wow so sad
yet so powerful,
keep it up!
-Lisa

It's more based on emotional aspects rather than other things. I do think the beginning was stronger then the ending. Somewhere along the way it loses...something (sorry I'm not sure what).
"And I slice to make me be.
Both an addiction that I hold,
An addiction that makes me be."
I think the repetition doesn't work too well with this but as I've said this one's more on emotions.
"I don't deserve to live yet death is too good for me."
To me that line's repetition works and at the same time gives me the sense that it can be used for a song. Still the emotions are down just maybe work a little more with the words to make it stronger.
~Faith-less

The emotions were really clear and strong, hope you're ok.

Sam xx