Comments : A Dead Body, And A Broken Heart

  • 16 years ago

    by Ixora

    Omfg! can i steal this poem for my aim profile?!?!?! i love it l.o.v.e. really no other words...i was expecting something great but this just blew me away....go you!

    *^*crow*^*

  • 16 years ago

    by makeupxxtypexxbeauty

    Great poem i really liked it..
    keep it up i cant wait 2 read more

  • 16 years ago

    by Andrew Morton

    "the heart is sorry, all he knows is pain"

    i dont know if it was intentional, but it seems as if your giving your heart a gender which has this crazy effectiveness to it...either wayi ts amazing haha, keep up the good work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Marina

    Oh my god!!! 5/5 such amaieing writieng!@ this is really good by far my favorite of yours!!! this is my favorite stanza

    "the heart is sorry, all he knows is pain
    he cuts to let the sorrow out, he cuts just to stay sane
    the heart cries, the body drips
    the blood runs down my fingertips
    sobbing and weeping, day and night
    cutting away to feel alright"

    oh wow that is BY FAR my favorite.. nicely done don't stop writeing.. please check out my new poems... 5/5!
    -Marina

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSuicidalxx

    OMG! I love this poem! It rocks! YOu are a spectacular writer! Definalty on my faves list!!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Windsong

    This poem is deep really deep .
    og i know the feeling i been there.
    but good work !

    chicken joeys BILLY ~

  • 16 years ago

    by 1Mistake

    Damn. O____O'' that was awesome!!

  • 16 years ago

    by HaileyHelen

    RICKY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!OMFG! dude! u made me cry! u no how long its been since i read 1 of ur poems... 2 long if they are so good they make me cry! u no u have me 2 talk 2... which we havent dun 4 a wile but u no im here 4 u!

  • 16 years ago

    by Taz

    OMG i luved that poem!! it was tops!!
    !~Taz~!

  • 16 years ago

    by clarity

    Awesome poem! I feel ya.

  • 16 years ago

    by Maddyxxx

    Wow I gave this a 5/5 I loved it. Great Job :)

  • 16 years ago

    by J u l e s

    Oh wow.. i can really relate to this one ... in so many ways.. the part cutting away to feel alrgith can relate to that line .. ALOT. but its an amazing poem <3

  • 15 years ago

    by munkee04

    I was going to choose my favorite part of the poem, but i cant, cause i love it all. It just makes so much sense. I've never been through something like that, but the way you express yourself, it makes me imagine that person, doing what you say they're doing. ANd its just so sad, that people actually go through that. Great writing...one of my faves...

  • 15 years ago

    by Unamed

    This has so much emotion, it was kinda hard for me to read..its not very poemy, but i think its good...
    Aly

  • 15 years ago

    by noha

    Its great poem you have here,sad and full of pain,i like the way that you talk about the heart like he is someone and the flow was great ,keep in good work,wel done 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by 1.Robert

    Good work, extremely moving, although poems are written sometimes in a state of fantasy and reflect nothing but our thoughts, they also allow for a thereuputical outlet for our emotions. I'd love to see you write poetry from a more loving perspective, go outside to nature, with pen and paper and write :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Lu

    One night gone another one past,
    I wonder how long this torture is gunna last,
    ^^^
    I would omit the I in the second line ... you will see how much better it will flow.
    gunna ----> going to

    The stranger cuts me, he hurts me inside
    Seeing me bleed, because of he who cannot thrive
    ^^^
    Very deep words.

    The heart is sorry, all he knows is pain
    He cuts to let the sorrow out, he cuts just to stay sane
    ^^^
    Here "he" is repeated 3 times .... perhaps you would like

    The heart is sorry, all he knows is pain
    Cuts to relieve sorrow, carves to stay sane

    He is dead and forgotten, but he still moves on
    Hes living life even though hes gone
    ^^^
    4 he and he's here .... perhaps

    Dead and forgotten, but still moves on
    Living life even though he's gone

    This world dosn't need a depressed broken heart
    That destroys its beholder, cutting it apart
    ^^^
    dosn't ----> doesn't
    I really like these 2 lines ... quite the imagery painted.

    I really like this piece, it shouts sadness and leaves the reader holding their heart.

    May the ink of your pen forever flow ....
    Luanne

  • 15 years ago

    by xxxlOvElY sWeEtHeArTxxx

    Ok to tell the truth, if it wernt for the little explanation at the end of the poem I wouldnt have understood it 3/5

  • 15 years ago

    by claire

    This poem is tottaly awesome!!!!! i love how the body is talking to the heart!!! i love the emotion!!!!!!!!!!

  • 15 years ago

    by helena

    Your so hot and that was a awsome poem you rock e-mail back to me. by the way your hoooooooooooot