• 16 years ago

    by Wake

    Woo-hoo.. kaz .. my dear friend.. what shall i say about this one.. AMAZING ..

    "..if you find me lying on the floor,
    just know that I was dead before,.."

    brilliantly worded .. and AWESOME right.. no doubt..
    i walk a step further, holding my breath..
    Keep it coming


  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    Great poem.
    the first stanza.
    is exactly how i feel. "/


  • 16 years ago

    by Devon

    Love it!

  • 16 years ago

    by Nowhere Man

    Great one.. It's kinda interesting... Love it. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by stephanie

    Woooooow absolutly amazing! u got me teared up ere haha. well done kaz :> x

  • 16 years ago

    by StormyStar

    I totally know how you feel! i like this one too! lol

  • 16 years ago

    by Shama

    It sounded so sad...

  • 16 years ago

    by Pete

    This is a good sorrow filled, heartfelt poem. Uses good imagery throughout. Has a certain edgyness to it that calls out for attention.
    Im unsure of a few of your spellings/grammar/punctuation, but it doesnt detract from the overall worthyness of this piece.

    A solid write of sorrow and foreboding.

    Nice Work.

  • 16 years ago

    by TwitcH i need 2 say sumthin bout dis....jus awe MAN!! really lyk the endnig para.......IT really makes me crawl.....

  • 14 years ago

    by mia

    I LOVE IT .. I LOVE IT ... I LOVE IT =)
    but why is it so sad.. altho' u rock in romantic ones kazy!!!!