Comments : Brick By Brick

  • 16 years ago

    by Daisy if you do

    Jeannie,
    I love the strength in this poem, damned and determined no-one will ever break beyond the walls that are built. Past pains have such a way of creating those. Great write....

    Kay

  • 16 years ago

    by Lu

    Don't think you'll be the one to break
    This wall of bricks apart
    It's high and it is sturdy strong
    And it surrounds my heart.

    For every brick was laid with care
    Each represent a blow
    That bounced against my heart with pain
    And buried in my soul.
    ^^^

    Oh Auntie these 2 stanzas just make me want to cry ... but I so admire the strength of the lady behind these words.

    The title is a definite eye catcher !
    Much love Auntie

  • 16 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    Beautiful...though I think this wasn't as deep as some of your other pieces. I still enjoyed it though, as I can relate to it. Though I don't think it was like your other pieces, it is definitely one of my favorites because it's down to earth and easier to understand. I enjoy the relateableness of it. Good job Twisted Heart!
    Charisma*

  • 16 years ago

    by My Decadent

    I am sorry if I keep repeating myself, but the rhymes and flow always stand out in your work.
    This stanza was my favourite:
    "I'm done with all the shattered dreams
    That fall with crystal tears
    I won't be pulled by silly hopes
    That'll plague me through the years."
    --- The first two lines paint a very visual and auditive picture. I also enjoyed how you used the expression "palgue me through the years". I think it's rather unique.
    Again, good work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Normal is the Watchword

    Nothing to say: I am in awe of your closing line.