Where do the broken hearts call home
While they are on the mend
Before they venture from the nest...
Until they love again.
Jeannie I love this ending. The entire poem read so wonderfully smooth, though sad *wipes tear again* dang Auntie you do this to me all the time ... lol
Very good rhymes and flow!
The message behind this poem was rather unique. You really managed to keep me interested until the end of the poem.
The only downside of this poem is the fact that it could use some more punctuation. I think it would be easier to read.
Other than that, it was a very pleasant read.
Oh.....my....gosh....Its been a LONG time since I told somone thier poem was my recently favorite one read...Jeannie! This was amazing and is definatly my favorite up to date piece I've read...Its one thing to pick a subject and try to write about it and not keep the structure of the poem maintain throughout the whole poem, but you my friend, you picked this topic, kept hte flow going and have asked something many wondrer.....I LOVED this!! One of my faves!!