What an amazing rhyme and flow! Everything was perfect! 5/5

The word worked together quite well, there were a few places I seen that could be worked out. The flow was very good, along with the idea/emotion of it.

Great job, darling.
Keep it up.

The flow was pretty good, and the rymthes worked.
I think the concept is a well known one, and you wrote it well.

Keep it up,
Elaine.