Comments : Life Lesson.

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammie

    I think a lot of people can relate to this, which is good, and the concept is broad. I like the way you write, and I'm not a person that only likes rhymed poetry, but I think that this would have flowed better if it did rhyme. My favorite line would have to be this one:
    I co"ld never be as perfect as I thought perfect was."
    Something about it just really stands out to me.
    Well done on this.

    Tammie

  • 16 years ago

    by Rheingold

    Ah, how I long for the real me could stay in the first part of your poem.

    We grow up, realize life isn't what we think it is whilst youunger.

    Oh how the young have no idea how much they have to live fo :(..

    I like this, very realistic.

  • 15 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Well written...
    well we never get whatever we want...I could relate it to my teenage yrs when I used to compare myself with others and used to get upset to realize that Im not perfect...
    but those days are over :) and Im quite happy with myself..
    your poem described all those tumoils... the complex feeling... very well done...

    keep writing..