"That silicon is cracking around your face; you're not that pretty anymore
With a defective smile and having no higher expectations than being a wh[]re.
Oh, those dimples tell so many lies you're trying to hide, and fail to do so,
I can see right through those button eyes and those sexual innuendos -
Oh, Darling, Darling, how you make me sick."

^^ Okay. I frikken love those lines.
So much anger and raw emotion and yet at the same time, I couldn't help but smile whilst reading them...you certainly have a way with words.

"And by the way, I just really wanted to say, "You're not worth my time, and f[]ck you."

^^My favourite part of the whole piece, it's just so in your face and ''yeah I've had enough.''

I love all of this piece...I think you did a wonderful job with this.
The opening is powerful and from there on each line just gets better and better.

I thought the repetition worked nicely, it got your point across well.
There is nothing, and I mean NOTHING, that I would change about this.

I really loved this one. I love how showed a strong person with vibrant thoughts and beliefs in this poem nice job xxx alex xxx

I loved ittt, Sheena. (:
Honest To God, I did.
I could even imagine the voice saying it, hahaha. (:

Amazing job, keep it up.
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Ah. More like a common poem, but still pulled off well. Different than the other ones that I've read.

"The silicone is cracking around your face"
Excellent line. Provokes a ridiculously strong image.

In entirety, though, the poem made me sad. I'm not sure if that was your intent or not, but it's a very strong poem. The reader can really get the personality of the narrator from just a few lines.
Great job.

I can taste the resentment and anger. Literally.

You did good.
It's hard to keep up with your poetry.

Wow

AMAZING!!!

You had a lot of spot in this poem that was just great then on the other hands some ned to be reajusted. I liked the poem overall but I think some spaces needed work. Good job anyways.
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Stanza one-
"You can call me sweetheart and baby I'll call you a mistake"
Wow, I love how the first line pulls you in straight away. It sorta feels like you really are speaking to the reader and not just telling a story. I really liked that about his poem.
I wasn't really into the repetition of "defective smile" but I guess you repeated it to get it across. I found it was strong the first time and repeated it sorta lost its edge.
I loved how you brought the title into the end of the stanza. & I loved the title, Really eye catching.

Stanza two-
"I'll shake this bitter town."
I'm not sure why but I really liked the way you worded this. Really stuck out, to me.
"regret fills your mouth and it's more than you can chew,"
I love this line, my favourite of the poem.
again you repeated the title and I thought it wrapped it up nicely.

I love how your poems contain very long sentences, & Have a lot going on. But still seem to flow perfectly and make sense.
I loved this one, a lot. <33