I loved it! Great job on this! 5/5...very strong and well written...keep writing!

Really good poem like it alot yea its short but its still really good 4/5

Didnt flow through the whole thing but it was good. deep and well i just like it. nice job. 5\5

Didnt flow through the whole thing but it was good. deep and well i just like it. nice job. 5\5

I loved it
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5/5
keep writing

Especially love the ending of this one, full of emotion. I like the structure of this and it's obviously straight from the heart. But so sad, chin up yeah? =)

Em xXx

It wasn't bad. Actually for not writing for a long time can really bring out good pieces. Here is some advice. 1. Try to have the same syllabol count in each line. an Ex. 5,6,5,7. It just makes it easier and the flow is much better. 2. Try to explain in more detail why you feel this way. It really helps the reader understand the situaution more. 3. Try to have a bit more emotion. The words that have emotion could be wanting, angst, desire, you know just throw some of those in there and it really helps out the poem.
3/5
kaila

Very true, i like it 5/5
xoxo
~waiting~

Couldnt tell at all that you havent written in a while, i liked it