Aww! great poem. I enjoyed reading it so much i read it like three times.lol 5/5

Well written and having an overall good impression.
The line"take back what you lost." should be "take back what you have lost." in order to sequence the events. Your poem is nice and I wonder why those thoughts are childlike thoughts :S

WOW, this is really deep!
Beautiful, I'm giving you 5/5!

Take care,

Ingrid

"Deceiving what shall be done,
proudly filling souls with lies. "

How I loved those lines...the depth and emotion it creates for the reader is awesome..

"Just steal back what's yours, just retrieve your soul."

^^ MY favourite line in the whole piece.
I found that particular line to have such intenstity and power.

This is a beautiful write, the emotion that is in this is overwhelming, while the flow, the imagery, the words, all come together to create a truly beautiful read.

With less than a brain, and more than a heart

I love that line! It's so different!
5/5 Great Poem!