Comments : Do What U Want...Whenever U Want

  • 16 years ago

    by MyEscape

    It's a good poem. I like the thoughts behind it. I think that you don't need to repeat yourself in your very last line. I was thinking you could take out the VERY last line and just end it with "And let it all out" because that really sums it up!
    *ME*

  • 16 years ago

    by Shokry Al Qubati

    True emotions

  • 16 years ago

    by sexyCheckers

    Wow, 116 visits, and no ones rated?
    I Like the ending; Not so much the first stanza or whatever it's called.

    I can relate to it and sometimes I hesitate, and sometimes I say what I like, and people get up at me about it; IT'S CONFUSING! People are telling you to be "YOURSELF" but whenever you do they shove it down your throat.
    Dah.

    5/5 =]

  • 16 years ago

    by Wake

    "..I wonder how life is so strange
    When you think you have it all figured out
    You notice you're missing everything else
    That when u think its all said and done
    It's just the last chapter of your first book.."

    A start of brilliance which flowed through,
    it says all there is to say about the way one thinks of his/her life .. and the way it is shaping, or going to shape.
    sometimes we take things for granted, sometimes we over do it ..

    A super write this, i really liked the way you put together these thoughts.
    Don't stop writing
    Keep it coming

    ~Wake~