Very good!!

I like this one a lot...
The rhymes are very good, and you created intense atmosphere through the piece. The choice of words and the descriptions in it are excellent.
Very deep, too.
Keep writing!
5/5 from me

HAHA you dont write well? MY ASS! lol this is great! 5/5

Wow! I love it! Amazing poem and very uplifting in the last peice! Love it! Keep it up, your an awesome writer!

So very true, this poem captures the feelings of so many, weather they know it or not. Great work, keep it up! :)

Hey bro.
I really loved the way you used Rhyme scheming in this one. depicted good emotion.
voted and gave it a 5/5
please return the favor......
-peace