Comments : Forever Me And You.

  • 16 years ago

    by Gem

    "Whenever you need a shoulder,
    Or just need a hand to hold,
    No matter what time of day,
    I'll be there keeping you warm in the cold."

    The only thing i'd change is the last line of that stanza to simply, "I'll be keeping you warm in the cold." The flow faltered a bit and that would keep it consistant.

    But apart from that, such a beautiful love poem, really made me smile =)
    Well done
    5/5
    *Gem*