"she'll curse all her
Cd's of bands"
That last line didnt go with the flow. Maybe if you changed it to something like "She'll sit and curse, All her CD's of bands." but hey, do what you want.

That is a way sad story. Year 8 sounds harsh. It definitely made me think about ever wanting to call someone a name or anything. You really put a new light on the effects of that sort of thing. Many people (mostly girls) struggle from it, and I like what you said about it. It gives people the sad side rather than just the "fun" side of it all. Excellent job!

~Morgan~