Wow good work
amazingly written
keep it up!
-Lisa

Thanks lisa =]

Wow... that is so good.......i wish... wow i love it good job!!! im speachless

For a beginner you're not that bad.

If you want pointers, first, I wld say to add some syntax to make it easier to read.
This other stuff is purely on how you want it to be. Lyke personally I lyke my poems to rhyme and I try toput vivid imagery and strong diction to really make hu ever's reading it to get how i was feeling.

you've got alot of potential. just remember the most important thing is to make it meaningful to you and just express yourself

Wow. a male with emotion... =D i love this sooo much! you should punctuate it though. i know it seems unneccessary but really it makes alot of difference... <3 5/5

Beautifully writen. one of my favorite of urs. truly an amazing job you have done here. Please keep it up! 5/5

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy