Oh gosh. now i feel like an english teacher... eh. well here I go again.....
"because you can not control me no more
so i guess I'm about to go
to show that i have no more love for you anymore"

.. dont get offended though. i truly LOVE the poem... i guess im just condescending. my poems arent perfect though. just trying to help.just my opinion but I think the end would make a little more sense this way

because you can not control me anymore,
I guess I'm about to let go.
To show you that I love you no more.

I enjoy reading ur poems!!!!!!!! ur a great poet and will make an awsome one the more u write! keep up the great writting!!!!! 100/100

Very good...i've felt like this MANY times...very sweet...all your poems have wonderful messages to them...i enjoy reading them....keep it up hun!

Amazing job here!! things are never what they seem to be at first. blind by our own eyes. i can relate to this a lot.

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy