This was good. it had an unclear topic, but in this case, that made the reader wonder, think. it was worded excellently and read well. great write.

--TheGothicAlbino

Good job, be sure to finish, okay? It's really great.

Although you are not quiet finished yet. i think it was a wonderful poem. good work on the beggining piece. i think if you add grammer into it you will have a greater effect though.

-terra