Comments : Amnesia

  • 11 years ago

    by Pete

    I love this piece, not just because the flow and rhyme structure are solid as a rock but also because it has a true meaning.
    Live life to the fullest and love what you have before its too late.

    Great sentiment portrayed throughout. I wonder if a better title for this would be "Wonder" .. I really like the way its repeated throughout the poem. Gives it an air of uncertainty about it.

    I think this would flow a little bit smoother if it was broken up into stanza's, seeing it as one big para makes it feel daunting (but that's just a personal thing).

    Overall good performance, enhanced by the fact that it's your first piece!

    Wonderful work Gaz.
    [5/5]
    ~Pete.

  • 11 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    So true in so many ways. The structure as well as the rhymes where great. You are an amazing poet, keep up the great writes.

    Peace, Joe

  • 11 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    Again, great rhyme and flow, you have a real talent for those two. I love meaning in this piece. Very original. Great write. 5/5

    marcella

  • 11 years ago

    by DeadandBleeding

    Brilliant. it brings to light things alot of people forget to remember. Great flow and use of language. i just love this, it's so good.
    DnB