Wasnt my favorite one by you, but i still have to say, i really liked the last two lines!
the rest just didnt seem to work all that well - but i tihnk you should take those last two lines and work with them!

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Awww so cute. The girl that you like is really lucky to have a guy like you if you talk about her like this. lol

I loved it.. I wish I was that special girl lol keep writing

That was really nice and I am really interested in your writing becasue we are kinda the same i usted to always write about boys and nowi still do but i am also writing a story but many of them not just one so keep writing your a great writer...