Comments : For Those.

  • 13 years ago

    by xxSuicidalxx

    I love this poem! It sounds like me :( Its so true that poeple just look at you and cut you down like your trash....and they dont know how it makes us feel!
    Anyway, I love the poem! It captures the emotion so welll, and flows very well. I like it cause you can relate to it....Keep up the great work!

  • 13 years ago

    by Kyle

    Wow...this is like one of the most emotional and powerful peoms i've read....i feel as you feel, and i know the feeling you felt as you wrote that. your peom was beautiful,. great job brooke. 10/10

  • 13 years ago

    by Jess

    Wow this is a deep and sad poem.... i hate that people get so low to even think about cutting them... but keep up the good work 5/5

    xoxoxox
    Jess

  • 13 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    An emotional read. i think the emotion and the fact many people would be able to relate to your words are the best things about this poem. The subject is something some would find "cliche" but i think it is an issue that does need awareness raised about. To improve this peice i suggest you work firstly on the structure of the poem. Secoundly the flow. Maybe trying to use a fixed rhyme scheme may help you with the flow of the peice? You have used some rhyming couplets but not throughout and thats why the flow seems a little sketchy. My eprsonal fave stanza was the last;

    "But when you see this girl you'll surely never know
    Because she never let's her true feelings show"

    I think that stanza was very emotional and seemed to sum up the poem. Again soemthing mnay people would relate to. Keep writing. x

  • 13 years ago

    by Ashley

    She goes into the bathroom; it was one of those days
    Where turning the blade on herself would make all the pain go away

    Out of the corner of her eye, she sees in the mirror
    Bright red blood & sharp clear tears

    i love that part. it creates such a vivid portrayal of pain and hurt..i wrote a poem like this called red drip..but yours makes me feel like crying because theres so much emotion..5/5 <33