Comments : Officially Apart Of Me...

  • 16 years ago

    by awww

    So sweet and i like it.. you could just feel the love.. makes me go "awww"... i know a lot of people can relate to this or wish this was happening to them.. with that, a lot of people would love your poem ^_^ i just want to point something out..

    Your everything I�ve ever wanted- your more then you seem,
    You�re my night and shinning armor and the man in the reacquiring dream�

    um isnt it suppose to be "knight in shining armor"? something i just noticed :p well great job here 5/5 ^_^

    ~angel~

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Very beautiful emotions you expressed here. It was a sweet poem and something I know many wish to find, their knight in shining armor, the one that completes them. I did notice throughout your poem you used the word "your" when it is supposed to be "you're"

    Other then that it was an amazing read for me. Well done *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Pete

    Very touching poem, beautiful sentiment written here. The start of this explains what everyone is searching for in a relationship .. How do you express how you feel for someone without merely putting it into words.

    I think it could possibly have done with being a couple of stanzas more, but that simply might be because I enjoyed it and wanted some more.

    I truly hope he enjoys this poem as much as everyone else reading it surely will do.

    Nice Work.
    ~Pete.

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    The flow was very good the message was great and you left the reader with some real special emotions good job Plot121