Love it! Everything went together so perfectly. Perfect words; Perfect poem.
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Who can say the world is free and full of love and peace....

One day it be restored.... Hope so and this poem gives hope

Marvellouz one.. Keep on writing

(Best wishz...007)

This is an incredible poem, the flow is almost frightening amazing. I loved it. It sends a message in such a way that it is also just beautiful to read. Great job.

Incredible; the rhymes are amazing. great poem 5/5

I feel this poem correlates strongly with our modern society ... a darkly, strongly embattled world that is personified through this poem.

I like that there's no grammar whatsoever. It allows the reader to find their own flow, their own rhythm or pattern. It is a very brave move, but one that most definitely paid off.

I usually critique, but there's nothing to critique, so I'll just point out my favorite line in your work:

"As hate bleeds love into the ground"... this is probably one of the darkest, most beautiful lines I've read on this site. Forget the fact that there's a poem around it, the comprehension I get just from this line says what a thousand poems couldn't. The poem is great, but this line stands out starkly, to me at least. Blood of lovers is always spilled by those filled with hate. It is a sad fact in life, and what will likely result in the failure of the human race: our incessant self-destruction.

Thank you for a read that will stick with me.
10/5
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