Wow!! that poem was amazing! you can feel the emotion in it. very good

Courtney 5/5

Nice good job scott. too long for me tho
i wouldnt have the paitentice to write it

I found that the start was very well done. I really thought that it was the best part of the poem.

I noticed that you need to put your "I's" capatilized. There are some parts where it confused me to read "When it darkness comes," I think it's suppose to be "When It's darkness comes" I'm not sure. It just doesn't sound right to me.

I really liked the smilie between the fact that a life force is always like a candle at times it flickers and at times it burns bright. I like that and felt the concept was very well thought of.

5/5